Black Ghost

9/10 Profound!

Capitalize your "i" 's when referring to yourself. It's spelled "something" Also, the second to last line doesn't quite flow, it's a little long. Overall, if you revise this poem ...

I disagree with you,Teufelshund, I believe the Wii will beat the PS3. Maybe not in graphics, no, but in fun gaming. The same thing happened with the PSP and the ...

This was really interesting. I like how the main character suddenly realized he was in a dream. But I thought the end was a little sad though. But how are ...

I liked this a lot, Phorcys. The only thing that bugged me, though, is why Aiden was so concerned about a random chatter asking him to meet him somewhere at ...

I tried ordering sunday morning from but I failed miserably because I got an error at checkout. Then I tried going to the actual Costco and I got there five ...

Hide and Seek ~ Imogen Heap

Kind of short, I know, but I will add more later. :) **** Max got up from the bed and walked towards the pulsing red light. Its color was intense ...

What if Harry or Ron is Dumbledore from the past!!! Or not...

I agree, this is a very sloppy writing. Also, try not to post four poems at once. Instead, post one that has been revised. -Tony

Before you read, I want to tell you that the main character dies at the end.

Rosethorn, I really like the new ending. And the piece is a lot more better now that you've edited it. I hope you post more of it soon! :D -Tony

Okay, the guy emailed me back and apologized for it. He actually meant to say "damn, kid." like "wow, I can't believe you did that." But he still apologized because ...

What is purple? ~Max What's the worst thing you've ever done to someone?

I went to the critique circle the other day and checked it out. It's a site all about critiquing. So I decided to submit chapters one through three of "Why" ...